Sadness washes down Benita’s features
as her brothers’ eyes try to salve her spirit.
On this day of celebration,
she watches Miguel kiss his new girl
and starts to think of all the ways
that he might die.
Emptiness rushes over the life she’ll never have
as she reaches for the knife. Diego grabs her hand
and holds it in his own beneath the white cloth
that skirts abuela’s table laden with lemons and plantains.
Benita shudders, as Diego squeezes her hand.
Brenda Warren 2012
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Visit The Mag for more offerings inspired by Gaugin’s work. Thank you to Tess for the inspiration.
Wow! A great story has emerged from this picture. The poignancy of “all the ways that he might die” is palpable and inspired. I really enjoyed this piece.
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Pretty intense .. I like where you took the prompt!
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Nice piece – it sings another tale.
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Serious stuff! Wonderful how the tale took on such drama!
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I love the high drama you found in the painting. A lovely, imaginative write Brenda. Thank you for sharing this. =D
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I found this so touching. What a terrific tale.
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That’s some imagination you’ve used there…:)
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I do like this side of things! Nicely done!
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They have to fight for every morsel along the way. Sadly this is true in many regions even now! Great write Brenda!
Hank
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Nicely spun tale, Brenda. I love Gaugin’s work. You have done it justice with this piece.
Pamela
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This is awesome!
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oh dang…i think miguel better watch his back when diego is not around…smiles…wonder if it is the same one she pulled out her own heart…nice tight tale here…
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Oh, you and I had the same idea about the girl! How coincidental is that! I just went on all their sour faces. None of them seem happy and I thought she has the big bowl in front of her and the boys seemed to be waiting on her doing something as if she’s the mom. I like that we thought on the same lines but with differences . 🙂
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love the story you spun..x
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Ah, I was wondering what was going on.
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Very good!! I like this a complete glimpse into a brief emotion-filled moment that really could happen. Great write, Brenda!
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i like this “salve her spirit”
great narrative
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Well-imagined.
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Bad Miguel!! Nice vignette!
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You’ve created a flash fiction piece! Nicely done.
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