Dancing with silver spoon, the cradled moon
shines among stars. A nickel for the Milky Way.
A nickel for Cassiopeia.
The Milky Way cuts in to dance with the spoon.
The cradled moon watches them sway.
She shines her glow on the Milky Way dancing.
While spinning their shine by Cassiopeia,
silver spoon laughs at this fancy romancing
(and the little dog bays at the moon).
Brenda Warren 2016
Notes: This piece was written to a form called a san san. It was the prompt offered at NaPoWriMo today. In the san san a repetition of phrases or images occurs, and there is an end rhyme pattern, abcabdcd. The line in parentheses violates the form but completes the poem. Today, Elizabeth prompted us to do an exploration of silent messages our parents sent through action, or messages we passed on to our children. She provided Harry Chapin’s Cats in the Cradle for musical inspiration. I decided to create something with a nursery rhyme feel to it. My parents introduced me to nursery rhymes. Their silent message? Love language!
I love the form and content of this, Brenda. I’m tempted to try the san san.
It was fun, Viv. Although, as the parameters for the form weren’t well-defined, I followed the example poem. It’s difficult to find much info on this form.
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This is delightful to read and imagine! Smiles.
Love all the dancing and prancing you did in this. The form sounds a bit challenging at the moment, but it really creates a distinct rhythm that could be easily remembered, like a nursery rhyme. Fantastic choices throughout. And another Brava!