Unaccepted Apology

A spree, a bender, a binge, a fling,
you swear it didn’t mean a thing.
Fearsome and away,
part of every day,
it haunts you with this
empty- bellied hole,
painted gone with window black
aftereffects of booze and smack
written in your intimate reserves.

A spree, a bender, a binge, a fling,
you swear it doesn’t mean a thing,
confined inside a mind that can’t remember.

Outsider, User,
Soul Abuser,
you cast your only able body under.

Brenda Warren 2013

Process Notes:
Bender, binge, and fling were all listed as synonyms for spree in MS Word. I liked the way they sounded in a list together, so I used that as a first line. With some direction from wordle words, the rest of the piece wrote itself, then I polished it.

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19 thoughts on “Unaccepted Apology

  1. this was scary to me and I think it was, in part due to the use of rhyme, and the repetition of some hard sounds. i like it. i also enjoy your process notes, thanks for sharing.

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  2. Good one Brenda. I especially enjoyed your process notes. It is wonderful how these things can write themselves–and that is often my experience with wordles. Thanks for being so faithful with supplying the words!

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  3. I just wrote and tried unsuccessfully to post a comment (Interestingly enough it put smack dab in the mmiddle a comment I had just made on Eric’s poem, and I couldn’t get rid of it!)
    on this wonderful, hard-hitting poem. Right on target. Your muse as I said yesterday has definitely returned! I mentioned in my comment on the Sunday Whirlthat I wondered if you are planning something specila for #100? I’ll help if you need it. Might be fun to use words all associated with anniiversaries or centennials, etc.

    Here’s my poem this week:

    http://paulatohlinecalhoun1951.wordpress.com/2013/03/10/when-you-get-what-you-want/

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  4. Brenda, the repetition works effectively in this. Nice work and it reads with a great smoothness. Tell me, are we gonna have a party next week for our 100th wordle? 🙂

    Pamela

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  5. Exactly the right flow of words..throw away for the one on the oblivion side..intolerable for the one on the other..holding on..watching..false apologies should never be accepted..

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