Materializing Fences

(What if intense sadness covers everything that’s left?)

Tentacles gravel through an amalgam of trash.
Tentative filtering, fingering, floundering.

Finding nothing, empty mouths open.

Vacant notices plaster poles with pleas,
Vacuous and never – )ending
Plastering bullshit until it stings eyes.

Dung bricks begin to fall from heavy tongues,
dis- (balance) -rupting.

No one notices a fence until after it is fashioned.

 

Brenda Warren 2013

 

 

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20 thoughts on “Materializing Fences

  1. Powerful social commentary combined with a clever take on the words. My favorite lines are:
    Tentacles gravel through an amalgam of trash.
    Tentative filtering, fingering, floundering.

    The use of “gravel” as a verb was, for me, a revelation. Loved this, and thanks for the Wordle, Brenda! Amy

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  2. Wow the words felt like marbles in the mouth. A great way to write about building a fence. Sort of a counter poem to Frost’s “Mending Wall”. At least my mind went that way.

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  3. Well, Brenda, this is fabulous. I love your use of alliteration, very well done. I didn’t finish my poem, lack of time, lack of energy, you name it, I have had a lack of it. 🙂

    Pamela

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  4. Nicely done Brenda…I found these words crying out for alliterative cousins for some reason and gave them many; you have made sense with both alliteration and content, and your last line is brilliant.

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