it wasn’t the first time

No. Every single full moon night
brings back her daddy’s hired man
and how he took her in the barn
the way a stallion takes a filly
eyes rolling wild in its head.

Brenda Warren 2012

This is a 33 word piece written for Trifecta: Trifextra. The title is the prompt.

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22 thoughts on “it wasn’t the first time

  1. I loved the economy of your words and the ambiguous nature of her involvement. Nicely done.
    Thanks for linking up. Don’t forget to come back tomorrow for the new prompt.

  2. What I love about this short poem is that the story could be one of two things: either he “took” her against her will or he “took” her willingly. “Wild eyes” can mean different things. My favorite poetry is 1) short and 2) open to different interpretations. You have succeeded in pleasing my poetry-meter. :)

  3. Your words have wrought a very vivid reaction.The imagery is emotionally raw. This is very well written without being overly graphic. I get the picture in the sparseness of words.

  4. Wow. You really deserve to be the winner this week for sure, if not in the top three at least. Wow. What a piece! So much said in so little! The imagery is amazing, stunning, evocative, so many thoughts and feelings expressed here in just 33 little words! Again, wow.

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