purging dragons

Origami dreams flash
in exquisite black shapes
that spangle dark the sky.
A cacophony of folded forms
flutters aches behind my eyes.

Ethereal dragons,
not faced in abstract dreamscapes
remain shelved to ferment
and later climb my throat’s slow rise.
Night eats them alive.

Outside my window,
in undulating blankets of blackness
a murder of crows caws a coda,
a dirge to the dragons
that color dark my soul.

Brenda Warren 2012

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43 thoughts on “purging dragons

  1. Your poem reminds me of a line from a Peter Gabriel song, “The darkness still has work to do.” You really let the words lead you with this one, and I like it when that happens, because it usually results in such delightful surprises. Congrats on this year of wordles and thank you for all the poetry you have prompted. Here’s to another year,

    Elizabeth

    http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com

    PS Thanks so much for your generous comments, it’s good to be back. Oh, and the legend of the crow is called The Rainbow Crow.

  2. Reiterating the comments before me- but I was drawn into those “undulating blankets of blackness”. You reel us is every week – and leave us to wrangling words. Thanks again. And happy anniversary.

  3. My children once had a book that named groups of things, like a pod of whales…I think I knew about a murder of crows…but not sure if that was in the book. What a delicious description of that clever bird of dark wing. I think there also was a story tale about how the crow was once a beautifully colored bird but because perhaps of false pride was stripped of color and became blackened. Night is always an intriguing time. I like the second stanza where you ferment and I think savor your trusty “dragons'” breath to eat the nightmares away! That’s how I read it…
    I took a different route:

    http://julesgemsandstuff.blogspot.com/2012/04/sugar-and-spice.html

    • Jules, I’ve read that story about the crows…I think there is a picture book around here somewhere, but I’ll be darned if I can remember what it’s called. It’s illustrated with colorful silhouettes of birds.
      As always, I appreciate your comments. Thank you.

  4. this poem paints a clear picture in the darkness… I liked the alliteration in: a murder of crows caws a coda. The last stanza is strong!

  5. Brenda, oh, that first stanza! I had a nightmare like that once. And “spangle dark the sky” – I just love that line. Purge the ethereal and embrace the real.

    Richard

  6. My! This one is dark, but very well wrought! BTW, Happy Anniversary! I really appreciate your presence here in the Blogosphere – it adds great joy to my week. Even when I don’t have the time to write, just reading the entries is fun!

  7. Happy Anniversary. Hard to believe it’s been a whole year of weekly wordles.

    I loved the line about undulating blankets of darkness–that whole stanza, actually. Beautiful.

    My approach to this list of words was a bit different this week. I took the words in the order you gave them to us in the email and wrote a line for each one…whatever popped into my head. Then I rearranged the words in alpha order and put their corresponding lines in that order. I changed only a couple pronouns and added one word. It was fun. :)

  8. As others have noted I really like the images, the darkness one can feel. And it is fun to be reminded of the murder of crows! Thanks for keeping up with all the wordles!

    • Thank you Peggy. I’ve said it before, and I’ll say it again…the wordles are one of my favorite things. I’ll keep keeping on, until I feel otherwise, and that’s not likely. :)

  9. “Undulating blankets of blackness a murder of crows caws a coda, a dirge to the dragons that color dark my soul.” I love the sound of these words, and your successful use of alliteration. This is a VERY fine poem, Brenda, one of my favorites. How fitting that you have written it this week!

    • Thank you so much, Marianne. I appreciate your enthusiasm. I like the crows caws a coda bit, too. At first I had a “cacophony of crows caws a coda…” but I liked the cacophony of crows the first time, so thought I’d change it up a bit. That would have added to that alliteration….I do like it better, but it’s always a give and take constructing these pieces. :)

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